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Vin 01:59 pm UTC 02/26/14 |
| In reply to: | As long as we're sharing - The_wolf_with_the_red_roses 12:59 am UTC 02/23/14 |
| Hey Wolf - I'm not much of a country music fan, or familiar with Hank Williams' work (though I've certainly heard he is excellent), but I can definitely "hear" this being played on Country radio. If I had to make a suggestion, I'd say the song might benefit from a proper chorus to stick in the listener's head. Or, "the hook," as I guess they call it these days. (It brings you back, if Blues Traveller is to be believed.) > I know Jim's a fan of country music, and had even name > dropped Hank Williams as one of his favourites. Hank was > less a song writer and more of a poet. With that in mind > I'd thought I'd rip him off. Writing with the simple > musical accompaniment Hank's song "Cold Cold Heart" in > mind I came up with this. Work in progress, but any > thoughts would be welcome. Below is a link To Hank's Cold > Cold Heart as a point of reference. > > > The Start > > Before I sleep and as I wake > I only think of you > The answer to my years of prayer > And search for something new > The ground before your feet is blessed > Your smile lights up my heart > But you tell me that you don't love me > And have done from the start > > He'll never know how blessed he is > To have you on his arm > It seems to me that over night > You've fallen for his charm > All the while I long for you > I make loneliness an art > Your love is meant for someone else > And has been from the start > > You've seen me at my very worst > And still called me your friend > But one thing that you can't do for me > Is make this longing end > You've taught me countless ways to fail > In ways to win your heart > But each new failure driver me on > Then I plan back from the start > > I'd do anything to kiss your lips and hold your pretty > hand > But you're always reminding me of lines drawn in the sand > > Everyday I learn anew, that we're leagues apart > But I'll keep waiting for your love > And happiness to start > > | |
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