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re: As long as we're sharing

Posted by:
Vin 06:59 am MST 02/26/14
In reply to: As long as we're sharing - The_wolf_with_the_red_roses 05:59 pm MST 02/22/14

Hey Wolf -

I'm not much of a country music fan, or familiar with Hank Williams' work (though I've certainly heard he is excellent), but I can definitely "hear" this being played on Country radio.

If I had to make a suggestion, I'd say the song might benefit from a proper chorus to stick in the listener's head. Or, "the hook," as I guess they call it these days. (It brings you back, if Blues Traveller is to be believed.)

> I know Jim's a fan of country music, and had even name
> dropped Hank Williams as one of his favourites. Hank was
> less a song writer and more of a poet. With that in mind
> I'd thought I'd rip him off. Writing with the simple
> musical accompaniment Hank's song "Cold Cold Heart" in
> mind I came up with this. Work in progress, but any
> thoughts would be welcome. Below is a link To Hank's Cold
> Cold Heart as a point of reference.
>
>
> The Start
>
> Before I sleep and as I wake
> I only think of you
> The answer to my years of prayer
> And search for something new
> The ground before your feet is blessed
> Your smile lights up my heart
> But you tell me that you don't love me
> And have done from the start
>
> He'll never know how blessed he is
> To have you on his arm
> It seems to me that over night
> You've fallen for his charm
> All the while I long for you
> I make loneliness an art
> Your love is meant for someone else
> And has been from the start
>
> You've seen me at my very worst
> And still called me your friend
> But one thing that you can't do for me
> Is make this longing end
> You've taught me countless ways to fail
> In ways to win your heart
> But each new failure driver me on
> Then I plan back from the start
>
> I'd do anything to kiss your lips and hold your pretty
> hand
> But you're always reminding me of lines drawn in the sand
>
> Everyday I learn anew, that we're leagues apart
> But I'll keep waiting for your love
> And happiness to start
>
>


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