> However, I would keep going on the tombstone theme:
> Perhaps add
>
> "In blink of an eye
> It all can change
> (Welcome To)The Neighborhood of Tombstones
> Just granite and names
This is good. If the verse repeats, use these lines the second time. Cause the original is really, really good. "Thousands of tombstones waiting for names"
I guess we thank Ryan for that one.
>
> In the blink of an eye
> the tides can turn
> The cost of the war
> just dust on the urn"
Not knowing the context of the song, I like the first lines
In the blink of an eye
All is lost
The storms they rumble
And the winds are tossed
because they give me the impression of a shipwreck, or at least life at sea.
Yours really are good, more about battle. It'd be nice to know if this song is before or after a battle with the Lost Boys, or if that has anything at all to do with it.
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