I've thought of some other comments that I'd like to make. I think that starting in the woods is a good idea because Ruby and her friend are isolated and they continue to be isolated when they enter the house of Zarcovas. The friend (sorry I can't remember his name) says that Zarcovas is a tramp and when they see the house Ruby says: "He's a rich tramp, isn't he?" That to me is very good scriptwriting. Are you aiming at being a screenwriter as well as a director? I think that Zarcovas helps to create the suspense when he says: "You don't make appointments here." Again, very good scriptwriting. I can understand Ruby's desire to look into the future when she says that she doen't want to be asking customers if they want "chocolate with their Playboy magazine". Its only later that we realise Zarcovas is actually on earth to punish people who want to look into the future. Its brilliant that the audience don't know that at first. Very good plotting. Up to the point that Ruby holds hands with Zarcovas, the suspense is slowly building but the audience gets a real shock during the hand holding. The dubbed voices are excellent and then the sudden gun shot and the scream. At this point we know that Zarcovas is not exactly a fortune teller. Suddenly Ruby has blood on her face and a very effective heart beat is used. When the friend starts to argue with Zarcovas, Zarcovas comes up with the brilliant line: "You're all so greedy to know forbidden information." That is a cool and creepy concept. The actor who plays Zarcovas seemed to have some problem with his lines at first but by this point he is doing a very good acting job. When we learn that he is an alien, we of course start to worry about what he is going to do to Ruby's friend. Then Zarcovas reaches out his hands to the friend and says: "No resisiting. Just give yourself to me." At this point the audience knows that the friend hasn't got much hope. For a few seconds we are fooled into thinking that the friend is waking up from a dream but then we see Ruby covered with blood and a very effective light change is used to make the scene more dramatic. I like the special effect used when the weird music is played and Zarcovas turns and disappears. I can't believe that you told such a complete story in only nine minutes. Possibly the best thing is the concept. An alien posing as a fortune teller so that he can punish humans who are greedy for knowledge. Gosh. I hope you can turn this into a cinema movie in the future. Do you ever write feature length scripts? Anyway, well done. I agree with AndrewG, You have come up with an excellent product. Let me know what your professors have to say. I would be very interested to hear their various opinions.
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