Not bad at all!! I can tell that you used the rythm of the actual song instead of just writing lyrics that doesn't flow at all. I could imagine that.
> I think Vin asked for a Frying Pan verse. This may not fit
> with the rest of the song, but I like it:
>
> It’s only 2 o’clock
> But my temperature’s beginning to soar
> An ev’ry single muscle
> Is burning with a fever, you’re the only cure
>
> I’ve never been this hot
> An I’ve never been so wired
> An ravenous is all that I feel
>
> Ooh your bodies ev’ry fantasy
> An I’m begging baby, hurry up and give me a taste
> Ooh your bodies ev’ry fantasy
> An I’m dying baby, hurry up and give me a taste!
>
> Come On! Come On!
> An take a roll of the dice
> You’ve been yearning forever, don’t you ever think twice!
>
> Come On! Come On!
> It’s time to follow your dreams
> Take ‘em over the top, way beyond the extremes
> Take ‘em over the top, there’s no such thing as extremes!
>
>
> So banish all your inhibitions
> Break all your chains, you know they’re starting to rust
> Follow the sound of my heartbeat now
> It’s racing faster than ever, in a rhythm of lust
>
> Just open your heart and whisper all of your needs
> I’ll answer ev’ry single desire
>
> I’m gonna take you...
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