My lyrics are about looking back, yearning & regretting and I like how your using it for Batman.
It does need some (minor) tweaks for your context, but not sure if your lyrics work.
> For my body feels like hell that's cold and
> Frozen
Don't like this line.
> All these damned memories
> Are so cruel and relentless
> They go on forever
Sorry, my line 'they'll just haunt forever' is much better.
> And they twist and they turn
> And they tease and then deny
> And always burn endlessly
Sorry, prefer my lines: 'How they twist & they turn, how they tease & then deny, they’ll always burn, endlessly'
> Take me back to the start
> To a time when everything was so brand new
> And golden
You need to have the last word rhyme with 'fears' (in the next section), otherwise there's no pattern.
'Let me banish all this heartache, wipe away, all these tears' works within your Batman context?
> How I hate here and now
> So much emptiness torments me
> There's no hope, only fear
Fear should be plural (it matters).
> Am I cursed for all time?
> Am I cursed to pay a penance nightly for
> An old crime
Not sure if your lines fit the melody. 'Am I cursed to fight alone until the day, that I die' could work?
> There's nothing left here
> Just endless faces
> And Gotham's regrets...
How about (as Batman dejectedly looks out over Gotham):
'There's so much evil...
Unending darkness...
Oh Gotham City...'
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