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wordnix 10:17 pm UTC 11/03/08 |
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re: She Holds The Key - Pudding 09:02 pm UTC 11/03/08 |
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Can't say I agree. Ryan's better.
> Still not very good. Are these supposed be Steinmanesque,
> which is why you're posting them on the board? if they are
> then they're missing the mark big time. They're more
> Ryanesque to be honest.
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> > I told a pretty girl
> > I would write her a poem
> > Her eyes lit up the dark world
> > I used to call my own
> > I yearn to hold her flame
> > into her candle I am thrown
> >
> > As we speak thru each other
> > (I ponder)
> > If instincts allow her
> > our bodies we could smother
> > I'm not asking her to be my lover
> > Only letting her know these feelings I am under
> > I stare toward her with sinful wonder
> >
> > When in her presence
> > all is fallen into relevance
> >
> > To my astonished surprise
> > lightning flashes twice
> > Inside of her eyes,
> > Swept aside from naked thighs
> > and some more I wonder
> >
> > In glimpses I would see
> > flashes of possibility
> > This is all it will ever be
> > through this life
> > collapsing into eternity
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