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Pudding 09:02 pm UTC 11/03/08 |
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She Holds The Key - RSG 04:14 pm UTC 11/03/08 |
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Still not very good. Are these supposed be Steinmanesque, which is why you're posting them on the board? if they are then they're missing the mark big time. They're more Ryanesque to be honest.
> I told a pretty girl
> I would write her a poem
> Her eyes lit up the dark world
> I used to call my own
> I yearn to hold her flame
> into her candle I am thrown
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> As we speak thru each other
> (I ponder)
> If instincts allow her
> our bodies we could smother
> I'm not asking her to be my lover
> Only letting her know these feelings I am under
> I stare toward her with sinful wonder
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> When in her presence
> all is fallen into relevance
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> To my astonished surprise
> lightning flashes twice
> Inside of her eyes,
> Swept aside from naked thighs
> and some more I wonder
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> In glimpses I would see
> flashes of possibility
> This is all it will ever be
> through this life
> collapsing into eternity
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