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The_Jackster 07:16 pm UTC 10/28/07 |
| In reply to: | Alright, he wants opinions, here's mine! - The_Jackster 07:31 pm UTC 10/27/07 |
| Klinzman, you got it all wrong. I'm not telling him to cut them down to three minutes, or even to leave them as is. I'm saying, much like "Only When I Feel," that there is no coherent theme running through this combination, and the potential songs work much better alone. Maybe they could be 10-12 min epics in and of themselves. To prove my point, here they are, divided by song (Jim's initial lyrics, errors intact, are pasted in italics for the sake of brevity): I WILL DECORATE THIS CITY (WITH RIBBONS OF BLOOD) I will decorate this city With Ribbons Of Blood I will find the endless tears Soon to be a flood I will conjure up the magic Far beyond your sight I’ll illuminate this city With the ascension of the light Eternal terrors hold us down Keep us plodding in the mud I WILL DECORATE THIS CITY IN RIBBONS OF BLOOD. ETERNAL TERRORS HOLD US DOWN AND WE’LL ALL BE DROWNING IN THE MUD! I will decorate this city With ribbons of blood……………… I I I I WILL DECORATE THIS CITY WITH RIBBONS OF BLOOD! ONCE THE DEVIL'S PLAYGROUND (I had an idea for this part. When I read the lyrics, I heard backing vocalists in my head singing "Once the Devil's playground, always something new..." I figured this would be a nice tie of the "once always disappears" theme and the Devil's playground concept.) Broken hearts Are the Devil’s Playground Shattered dreams Disillusioned youth And all of man Is the Devil’s Playground Shameless lies And Shameful truth We’ll all succumb! And some time when The Dark exults and moons arise In the blink of an eye The Devil’s Playground Is Born Again! The Devil’s Playground Is Alive Again! So Come On Down To the Devil’s Playground! Come On Down Before It Disappears In the blink of an eye You see the Devil’s playground Now it all seems dead But it used to be here…Once! (Once it was here) Once! Before it disappeared! Once! ‘Once’ always disappears Trembling hands Are the Devil’s Playground Empty plans And hollow hopes IN THE BLINK OF AN EYE In the blink of an eye All is lost The storms they rumble And the winds are tossed In the blink of an eye You’re a sad old man Trying to remember Whatever you can In the blink of an eye Death will clutch you No respect For fortune or Fame In the blink of an eye It all awaits you Thousand of tombstones Waiting for the names Just waiting for the names In the blink of an eye…………… In the blink of an eye…………… In the blink of an ------- PARADISE LOST (soft) No matter How tragic the loss No matter How heavy the cost To this very day I can stand tall and say: I fought for Paradise But Paradise lost I fought for Paradise And Paradise lost. It wasn’t your fault or mine Wasn’t this it wasn’t that But Paradise lost In the final at bat Paradise lost In the last at bat. (DARK.) As I said, with the exception of one phrase being used in two different sections, there is no one theme running between all the sections as one song. They work far better to the naked eye separate than together. Together, they are scatter shot, without any one target in particular. Hopefully, my separating them for you has proved my point. | |
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