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Vin 02:53 am UTC 07/02/09 |
| In reply to: | re: You Pay for What You Get - John_Galt 07:14 pm UTC 07/01/09 |
| Yeah, I didn't mean for it to be this dark back when it was just a title and a little chorus. I thought it would be more like PBTDL, plot-wise, in that a guy would probably get sucked into a bad relationship due to a one-night stand. Once I started with the verses, though, it became more of a number for "Fatal Attraction: The Musical." (with a nod to "Seven" thrown in for good measure.) That's my favorite line here, too! Thank you for the kind words. > Very, very dark. My favorite line: > > "I wonder if she smells at all my shadow's scent on you" > > I also thought that the woman's use of terms of endearment > like "honey" and "boy" after a brief sexual affair > resounded as particularly creepy. I'm not sure about you, > but people -- and women, in particular -- who use pet > names and terms of endearment without knowing you really > well sound either (a) condescending or (b) emotionally > unstable and crazy. It's a pretty big warning sign that > you could sleep with a woman, but you shouldn't even think > about it. > > As usual, what I like best about your creative postings is > that the character/narrator's state of mind kind of > develops or grows more clear by the end of the song. The > effect here is terrific. It's almost like we go from a > girl who could be sad or jealous to a girl who has let > those emotions drive her to craziness and then to evil. > > [Apologies to all the feminists out there who thought this > lyric was about a heroine asserting her self-respect.] > > -=John Galt=- > > > > > I think I posted just the chorus of this a couple years > > ago (that's all I had!). Finally got around to fleshing > > it out into a full set of lyrics. > > > > As always, feedback is appreciated. You guys are my only > > outlet! > > > > > > Vin > > > > > > > > You Pay for What You Get > > > > Another unanswered phone call, pretending you’re not home > > But the car that’s in your driveway speaks the truth, > > You’re not alone > > > > Two shadows in the window, making nice like shadows do > > I wonder if she smells at all my shadow’s scent on you > > > > You asked me for my name and number > > I gave you so much more > > I took you home and made you whole, > > When you were half a man with her > > I didn’t ask for your commitment > > I know its somewhere else > > But honey I’m no broken toy > > Sitting quiet on the shelf > > > > We said “no strings” but there’s no such thing > > Be warned, boy, and never forget: > > Nobody rides for free anymore, > > And you pay for what you get > > > > What kind of lies did you tell her, so you could lie with > > me? > > And how’d you strike that girl so blind > > That she just couldn’t see? > > > > But she’s pretty when she’s sleeping, such a pity to > > disturb > > Its only you and I now, boy, we get what we deserve > > > > Don’t ask me what’s inside the box > > Your secret’s safe with me. > > Just brace yourself and peek inside > > And tell me what you see. > > They’re pieces of the heart you broke > > Although she never knew. > > There was a man of her dreams and a man in my bed > > And both of them were you > > > > We said “no strings,” just a one-night fling, > > But this night isn’t over quite yet > > Nobody ride’s for free anymore > > And you pay for what you get > > > > No, even the first taste ain’t free anymore > > And you pay for what you get! > > > > Don’t look so surprised, and boy don’t you cry > > You’re only reaping the seeds that you’ve sown > > You can’t straddle two fences without consequences, > > Comeuppance will find you for all your offenses, > > Even the ones you disown. > > > > And she’s so pretty when she’s sleeping > > Remember her that way > > She’s better off than both of us > > And that’s just how she’ll stay > > | |
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